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Rule 1. Follow the naming laws.
A small but important rule, while its not officially put in the Warrior Code, however the clans do normally follow it, just like the other rules. Except Skyclan in some cases, So what's this rule?

DO NOT. Call your cat...

anything Moon. (Moonfur, Brightmoon etc)

Anything star UNLESS a leader. (Starwing, etc)

Anything that is a human item. (Hammerclaw, Bulletwind, Silverbarrel etc)

Clan words at the front of their names. (Unless that is a founder of a brand new clan, it shouldn't be there). (Thunderfoot. Windstorm Skywing)

When this has been broken: Windflight, Moonflower Skyheart. mistakes Vicky apologised for. Only exception to this was Skywatcher.

Quote from one of the Erin's about the moon name "...So the moon has significance, mystery, beauty, but not actual power, if you see what I mean. Early on, we decided that the name "moon" shouldn't be used by Clan cats not because it would insult StarClan, but because it would imply that a particular cat had more beauty and significance than its Clanmates. In fact (Warriors trivia coming up!) Bluestar was originally called Moonstone! "

What they said about human names/items in the main clans. "Cat names are meant to only come from natural sources, and are meant to only consist of words that a wild cat would know. "
Fun fact! Tigerclaw/stars original name was Hammerclaw! But Vicky changed it because wild cats don't understand our Two-leg things.

DO

Use natural colours for names. (Grayspots, Blackpelt, Tawnyfur etc)

Use types of trees/plants for names. (Willowtail, Timberclaw etc.)

Name your warrior after landmarks and food. (Milksplash, Shrewnose, Runningcreek etc)

Avoid chucking random words together to make a name. Apparently this doesn't have to be followed in Skyclan. I mean Bouncefire? Harveymoon? Billystorm? Yes I understand the kittypets wanted to keep their names, they still sound stupid however. (Good examples of these failed names  are Waterblaze, Snailwing, Firecreek, Hutchwhisker, Blacklight etc)

If you are aiming to be original with names, but not sure on what, look up birds, look up tree types, anything that belongs to nature! Or just ask me, I'd be fine helping! (Elmpelt, Cedartail, Lilypatch Thriftpetal Ducknose.)


Rule 2. USE THE WARRIOR CODE!

Probably the most obvious, but mostly ignored rule. Why? I have no idea. For those hazy on all the official rules of the warrior code, I shall list them right now for you!

1. Defend your own clan with your life. You are allowed Friendships with other clans, but your main loyalty must be to your clan.

2. Do not hunt on another territory, or trespass.

3. All Elders, Queens Medicine-cat and kits are always fed before the Leader, Deputy, Warriors or Apprentices. Only exceptions are if the warrior or apprentice leader or deputy is ill. Or if they have permission from the leader or deputy.

4. prey is killed for food, show thanks to Starclan/ancestors by burying the remains when you are finished.

5. A kitten must be six moons/months before being apprenticed.

6. New warriors will sit vigil the first night they are made a warrior.

7. A cat can't be a deputy unless having mentored one Apprentice

8. The deputy of the clan becomes leader once leader is dead, or retired.

9. Once there is a new leader, or the old deputy is deceased/gone. The leader must choose a new deputy before moon-high

10. A gathering is held every full moon, there is no fighting during this time, as a full moon is the sign of a truce.

11. Boundaries are patrolled daily

12. No warrior must ignore a kit in danger, pain or lost, even if it is from another clan.

13. You listen to the leader of your clan like it is the rules of the warrior code. In other words, not to be ignored

14. A warrior does not need to kill to win a fight, unless a last resort or the rogue/loner is dangerous to the whole clan.

15. A warrior despises and rejects the soft life of a kittypet.

And the additional rules!

No gender medicine cat can take a mate or kits. Only exception is if they had kits, and they died (most of the time) or if they had a mate, but the mate left the clan, hates them  stops being their mate, or their mate dies.

Kits must stay in camp unless apprenticed, or hunt unless given permission and under strict super vision by the deputy or leader.

The safety of the clan is more important than one single warrior, mate or not.

Clans can not unite to drive out other clans.

Clans can not force another clan to share territory.
Clans can not attack a patrol that is on a mission that is agreed on by all leaders.


I understand that sometimes you must break these rules to make your story more  interesting or liven it up. However I often find a clan barely listening to the code is boring and over done, a truly dedicated clan to the code would be an interesting read if you went into detail why. And if your going to make a "bad" character, make him a saint. Seriously. Them following the code savagely to death then  turning if the code might be hurt. Hence why Hollyleaf was a good character!Or make the "bad" character a believable character, while its possible he could just break the code for fun, actually go into depth as to WHY he hates the code. No being half clan doesn't count. Or a medicine cat. Nice try though. Also don't use the boring abused child route. Or heartbroken, you just make them like Ashfur,


Rule 3. TRY


Be it maybe you don't have much time to write, or "you don't want to write anything serious." I see a lot of pretty poor fan fiction about. It recycling either these story lines OVER and OVER.

A kit (be it tom or she cat) receives a prophecy when it is born, telling them  either about their great destiny, or great evil, they grow up and their parents/sibling/best friend die, so then the tom/she-cat become the clans best warrior/leader of (Insert area and clan here)

A blind cat becomes a warrior (which has been proven impossible) and then slowly deputy and leader. Has a 'hard life' of being sympathized with, not taken seriously and worst of all, laughed at. LEGASP.

Your cat gets super powers from some prophecy just like the Three in the official series. They rebel against the code, their family, clan because 'their power is too great for anyone to understand' either they go bat-shit, or do their destiny shit and are permanently better then every other cat. The end.

A cat always works hard in hopes to get the mate he/she wants. When they don't they become Bat shit insane.  Then kill their enemy/once wanted mate/someone. And continue to live with their angst, hating everyone around them.

Or a combination of all the above. Seriously all because your busy Doesn't mean you can't think outside the box! Take me for example, I'm busy with many things, yet I still sit here and am working hard on the first original warrior cat story there will be in a long time. And actually it isn't about my OC's (well one is, but she isn't a copy of anyone nor is she super powered-awesome-named or abused-sad-depressed psychopath.) And its set in the four clans around the lake. Maybe you should stick around and learn a few things and tips! I'm often about to help so if you actually sat back and said "Hmm what could I do to make this seem better" you can ask me. Seriously I like helping people that's why I wrote this.
Please give feedback, I spent ages writing this.
One of a handful of lists i'm making to help Warriors fans write better fan fictions. Feel free to ask for help if your ever stuck naming a character, or when writing. :)

Next list - Herbs and what they do!
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BookCritic16 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Hobbyist
This was very helpful! Thank you!
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My story is about a tribe kit that was taken away by a hawk but the hawk dies and she survives. So my fan clan ThicketClan take her in. Her name is changed to Loomingkit so she's centered around this prophecy. More of a pre-prophecy because this a prologue to my series story Shattered. They have a slightly different warrior code. The only thing changed is that the clans must have two warriors in each clan knowledgeable about herbs just in case.
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Scaletpool Featured By Owner Edited Nov 26, 2014  New member Hobbyist Digital Artist
So I'm making a sort of sci-fi warrior series, and I kind of thought of the story and plot in one night. so this is what's going on:
(This is kind-of the summary)
it's the year 2057. Iron is a queen in the station on mars, since earth has been announced "unsustainable for life" after world war VI. Her mate is a follow up (a deputy stand) that was killed by another human, thought to be a wild animal/cat. Iron is devastated and is determined to find out who killed him. Secrets are uncovered every time she digs deeper, and could ruin the system for cats and humans forever.

I don't have an official prophecy, but this is mine:
"Sharp, un-cat like talons tear through anything in the way of it, even the beating hearts of the cats."
The prophecy won't be revealed until Iron joins the clans. (Yes, I know Iron isn't a warrior cat object, but she was raised by humans.)

Some things to note:
-all the cats in the space station are re-enforced with steal claws  (So they can defend themselves, the kits wont get theirs until they are smalls {apprentice age})
-There IS a station down on earth, but nobody can actually LIVE FOREVER on earth. they just go to and fro to gather oxygen for the space station.
-Iron has two kits; Frost and Fish. (frost was suggested by her mate, Carp)
-this is SCI-FI! its in the future, so not a lot of things will be left.

I would like some feed back please =3
(This will be like 3 books, but this will be spread out more)
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SparkytheWingedCat Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I have an idea for a whole original Warriors fan ark, but I've been having trouble making the plot less confusing and ridiculous. Basically it goes like this:

First Book: A SteamClan apprentice runs away due to her abusive mentor. A cat in another Clan finds her, and decides to train her in secret. She is eventually caught and the leader decides reluctantly to bring her in and become a MistClan cat. The new apprentice (Rainpaw) seems to get welcomed in time, but one of the apprentices is secretly jealous of her, as she wanted Rainpaw's mentor.

Second Book: A band of rouges living at a waterfall claim to be the original RockClan and name themselves StoneClan. In attempt to take their 'home' back, they try to rule the territory of MistClan, since the waterfall was in their territory. As you can guess, the book is about fighting StoneClan.

Third Book: The jealous apprentice (Olivepaw now Olivetail) has lost what her future would have been thanks to Rainpaw. Angry and resentful, Olivetail plots revenge, but as more cats from other Clans can relate to her, Olivetail eventually builds a 'Clan' and plans to kill Rainpaw.

That's all I have thoroughly planned out, and I'm not sure if it's any good. This guide was very nice and helpful though and I can see the effort put into it. Good job!
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KINGSirDrMr Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2014
I'm doing extensive research on Warriors and the like for my own original fan arc; I've come from other fandoms full of fanfiction and lets just say... yours isn't like that at face value, but here's some tips anyway based on research I've done on my attempt at writing one of these (sorry, harsh tone comes from an admiration for concise fiction, which my English classmates in high school or college never seemed to be able to obtain. Pet peeve).

- Your SteamClan seems to be just a plot device for the beginning of the first book, and seems absent in the others. As a clan in your region, I think they should have some more attention throughout the arc.

- To me, thanks to the internet and Star Trek 'Mary Sue' characters from its fandom, the love triangle has been shot, stabbed, killed, reanimated, then crucified, burned, buried, and had the ground terraformed beneath it, cities built on top of it and bombed, and then rebuilt and burned, had all the ashes shot into space, etc... I would omit it from the conflict. I am aware that people like love stories, this one is more of a me preference; if not omitted, I usually prefer it to be a trait defining/shaping sub-plot instead. Just try to avoid droll predictability and untimely insanity.

- How many cats could possibly relate to being ignored by a love interest because another cat comes in and swoops them away? Also, how many of them would actually join Olivepaw to take revenge, going against the code (if your story uses it). Is it enough to take on MistClan?

- The self-proclaimed StoneClan seems more like a nascence than a conflict. It seems like it is just there to get defeated and act as a filler book, honestly I can't find any purpose in its existence from what was presented above.

- A whole book about a loaner getting taken in by another clan? That would be like a whole book about the first five chapters of Into the Wild; difficult to break past 10,000 words, let alone 80,000 (average novel length).

- (This one is one even the authors basically omitted from the Warriors books).
There is no character development in this arc from what I can tell. The original Warriors cast seemed like cardboard 2D characters with no real development in personality and ideals/morals based on the events that took place or the events of their lives. I urge anyone writing anything to give characters some sort of development. Why do you think so many people were attracted to Scourge's character after his manga release? He gets a B for effort.


The thing that throws me off the most is the plotline itself. It just needs to be more concise, because it seems like the first and third could be combined into one longer one, and the second omitted completely; that's most of my problem with this one. Other than that, at least you made a plan instead of going in I'm a writer guns blazing yippie-kay-yay cowboy I read all books Doritos Mountain Dew 360NO$COPE wrote as I go 3 a week kind of fanfic writer.
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SparkytheWingedCat Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks for the critic :) I'll try to follow the advice.
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MimMeow Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I've spent a long time planning a fanfiction trilogy, here's the plot for the first book. Is it good enough?

Enraged by rejection by ThunderClan's leader, a StarClan cat fakes a prophecy to turn a ThunderClan cat against his leader. When the true nature of the prophecy is finally revealed, the cat of the prophecy is distraught, as his whole life was revolved around that prophecy, and it was what he built his identity upon. As the StarClan cat was from WindClan, he declares war on that Clan, even going so far as to bring modern BloodClan to the forest to have his revenge.

I haven't seen any fanfictions about a similar subject or plotline, but please tell me if I'm copying someone. Don't worry, I know exactly how to build up the emotions and motivations, so even if this seems extremely exaggerated the way I'm putting it, it should make good sense in the fanfiction itself.
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KINGSirDrMr Featured By Owner Edited Nov 2, 2014
It's interesting (in a good way) that you didn't use StarClan cats as a means to give living cats powers, good job. I don't see how BloodClan would get involved since they don't believe in StarClan anyway, and would be hard to drag into the story.
Other than that based off what you presented here, I haven't heard of a decent fanfic with a StarClan protagonist, nicely conceived. Kind of reminds me of Greek myths about the god's interactions with the humans... except not as one-sided I hope.

EDIT: I just realized that comment was made in a month ago. Oops.
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014
That sounds ok to me. I don't see anything wrong with it. :)
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shiningspirit731 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2014  Student General Artist
My fan fic is:

     The medicine cat of thunderclan gets a message from Thunderstar and it is " there will be one of four destined to suffer while the others thrive" later four kits are born and the medicine cat has to find out which kit is going to suffer

the med cats name is Mistybreeze
the kits warrior names are Featherpool, Oatclaw, Waterstorm, and Sparrowflight
the father is Brackenclaw
but the mom is Moonheart......
:3
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014
I think that's ok. You're better at coming up with prophecies than I am...
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shiningspirit731 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2014  Student General Artist
:3
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
Hey, um, does the name Silentflight make any sense to you? I was going to make him mute, but I decided to make him blind, instead. His name is Silentflight, because he has the strange ability to walk, run, or jump without making a sound, even if he steps on a dead leaf or a twig. He's the best hunter in ThunderClan because of his special ability. He's also the best fighter in ThunderClan, too, because his blindness makes his other senses a lot sharper. His other senses are even sharper than Jayfeather's! He's also able to pinpoint different scents and single-out one scent from all the others, even during a fast-paced battle when he's surrounded by a lot of other scents, so he always knows exactly where his opponent is.
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DrakynWyrm Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
(I'm going to just play the Devi's Advocate here.)

   Your cat sounds like a Gary Sue. I'm just going to put that out bluntly.

   In a fight, a cat's greatest asset is its eyes. That's why in a fight the pupil widens, so they can see more clearly. And, as we've seen in the first book of The Power of Three, Jaypaw is helpless in a fight against Breezepaw, and it took Lionpawe's help to beat him. And, think about it for a second. Of all our senses, the one that works the fastest, that process information to our brain the fastest, is our eyes. Even if his senses are heightened, his senses won't pick up things fast enough to be able to fight. (And don't say, "Oh, he's better than Jayfeather!" That only makes Silentflight sound even more like a Gary Sue, and impossible, at that.)
   And so, there's no way he'd be the best fighter in ThunderClan. Especially when you've got other cats who train extremely hard to be the best fighters (Like Lionblaze). Silentflight doesn't stand a chance.

  Next, I don't care how "good" your cat is, if he's tangible, then he can't step on leaves without making a sound. Especially dead leaves or twigs.

  And, now he's the best hunter too. As I've said before, it's all well and good using your other senses to locate prey. but when you've got it right underneath you, your senses of smell and sound are too general to accurately pinpoint the location of scampering prey. I'm just saying. Also, in that regard, he's competing with Dovewing as the best hunter. There is no way he can beat her.

  In real life, blind cats usually die quickly in the wild. Even if they're "used to it," he won't survive for too long. Because for every lucky mouse he can catch, there's about a hundred he won't.

   So, in short, if you don't want to break the canon, then you should have just kept him mute. Cut out the "he's blind/soundless" junk. Him being mute only makes much more sense, as there are many things he could have done to damage his throat. (Plus, while writing him out, you have a challenge on writing out his personality without using his words. That can make for a much better story than him being a Blind Gary Sue.)
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014
Ok, first of all, I don't even know who Gary Sue is. Secondly, do you think it's possible in real life for cats to never be physically hurt, or to enhance their senses as much as they want to when they want to, or do you think it's possible in real life for cats to walk in other cats dreams and read their minds whenever they want to? I'm just saying, the Warriors series hasn't always been entirely accurate, either. And, no offense, but what you wrote seemed a bit harsh to me. Also, I didn't mean to sound like I was putting Jayfeather down, if that's what you where thinking. Jayfeather is my favorite character in the Warriors series. I created Silentflight as a tribute to what Jayfeather wanted to be before he became a medicine cat. I'm sorry if it doesn't seem sensible to you, but i've decided to keep him just the way he is.
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DrakynWyrm Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
A Gary Stu is a male version of a Mary Sue, and is often defined as a poorly made character, bluntly put. The common attributes are over-perfection, overpowered-ness, everyone likes them, etc. Without any good reason/explanation for it, these characters are often despised by the readers, because more often than not, these characters are a form of ideal self insertion. In other words, only the author will enjoy them. A quick Google search could have told you what you needed.

(Also, I did warn you I was going to be blunt, didn't I? I believe in tough love kiddo, a swift kick in the pants, coupled with advice, will help get you to where you want to be; with an awesome and yet believable character.)

To be honest, with the powers thing, I thought that that was a major flaw in the series. I mean, only Jayfeather's power could have been considered useful. But, at least it had a reason--There was an actual prophecy assigned to it. No, I don't believe that the powers were realistic, but there's a limit to it. The thing was, you explicitly stated, and I quote,

  "He's the best hunter in ThunderClan because of his special ability. He's also the best fighter in ThunderClan, too, because his blindness makes his other senses a lot sharper. His other senses are even sharper than Jayfeather's! He's also able to pinpoint different scents and single-out one scent from all the others, even during a fast-paced battle when he's surrounded by a lot of other scents, so he always knows exactly where his opponent is."--August 22, 2014, copied and pasted.

  See what I mean? In a Clan where there is also excellent hunters/fighters/sensors, your cat just had to be the best at all of them. Almost everyone who writes will tell you that this is a very over-powered character.

 Blind cats, in the wild, die because they cannot hunt or fight. There are too many things happening at the same time for the senses to pick up. Even if the others are strengthened, they will not be able to pick up enough, not unless it is a completely quiet and serene area, which a battle and most hunts are not. The eyes and ears are what pick up the fastest things, but in a place where there's too much noise and calamity, the ears will simply be overwhelmed.

I'm not being mean; I'm being logical. Your cat is simply unbelievable, and slightly cliched, as well as a major Gary Stu. Follow my advice from earlier, or maybe come up with something more creative, and he should be a good enough character. Depending on how you handle him, he could even be great!

Should you choose to keep him the same way he is, I will respect that. I'm disappointed that you seem too stubborn to accept criticism on him, but I understand where you're coming from. Once, I had a character just like that; one I took criticisms against her to heart. looking back, I realized I created a face-palm worthy Mary Sue, and am now taking steps to reinvent her to become a believable and fun character. Just keep in mind one thing. Truly "perfect" characters are not infallible. More often than not, it's their weaknesses and flaws that make them interesting.

Well, it was a pleasure speaking to you. Unless you have anything else you'd like to add, God bless, and good night.
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014
Maybe he is a bit overpowering, but I don't know how else he could become a warrior... I already gave my medicine cat another apprentice and it just doesn't seem fair for him to live in the elder's den his entire life feeling completely useless to his clan... :(
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DrakynWyrm Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That is a toughie..But, you know what? I bet, of you think about all the possibilities, he might have an advantage.

This is is just of the top of my head, but what if he was guided by a dead character, as a "seeing eye" guide. Maybe you can try the same thing? If he's the main character, then you can have him have a very powerful connection with StarClan, or maybe just one cat in particular. Maybe he almost died once and then was forever entwined with StarClan? Perhaps he can only speak to them, and thus the "silent" part in his name makes greater sense.

This is just of the top of my head, but I'm sure if you think more, you can come up with something even better.

I hope I helped. ^^
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014
Wow... That... is... an AWESOME idea! I'll have to use that! Thanks so much! I feel so much better about Silentflight, now! :D
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DrakynWyrm Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha, found my old OC that had that ability...Oh well, enjoy the idea!
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WarriorCatNadja Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
How about Swiftstar mousefeather and ravenwing?
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
I think Swiftstar and Ravenwing are great! Although, Mousefeather doesn't really make much sense. You could do Mousepelt, Mousestrike, Mouseblaze, or Falconfeather, Eaglefeather, Fallingfeather, or maybe even Softfeather. Just a few suggestions of names that I like with "mouse" or "feather" in them. You don't have to use them if you don't like them.
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SHALI23 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I had a cat named Bladekit, mostly because it sounded so badass but after a while I realized cats didn't know what blades are. That is, unless you count blades of grass since that's part of nature. Now that I think of it...I might just keep his name as Bladekit. I wouldn't have the faintest what his warrior name would be though. xD
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TabbyKittyArt Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i cannot think of anything... but so far i have an idea that the deputy dies and the main character is chosen as deputy but in a battle a few weeks later the leader gets blinded and retires and the main character faces the challenges of being a leader and he finds that the clan doesn't trust him because of his young inexperienced age. then he chooses one cat as a deputy but he takes the opportunity and brings together a gang of rouges to set a trap to kill the main cat in exchange he will give them a spot in the clan. but the main cat manages to escape and gathers his clan to fight back and in the end they win and he finally has gained the trust of his clan. and he gets the girl and then there will be a sequel.

    it sounds horrible..... but yeah....
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DrakynWyrm Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
If you want my opinion, if you can write it out well enough, that could make for a decent plot.
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
That sounds pretty good to me! Better than mine...
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VixehKitteh Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
My story is so lame o^o

An apprentice is driven out of her Clan for not following her ambitious father's orders to murder her sister. She collapses and is found by two cats, which bring her back to their Clan, BerylClan. She wakes up and is asked what happened, and is then invited. A band of rogues suddenly invade and take one of the leader's lives. She becomes part of the Clan and trains blah blah blah
She and other chosen cats then go on a mission, due to the Medicine cat's dream, and find out that Amber's, the cat driven out, original Clan was slaughtered with no traces of who did it-- Other than an unfamiliar scent. More deaths come blah blah blah, Azure becomes deputy and soon leader blah blah blah. And then Amber realizes her love for her friend, Azureclaw, blh blah blah bi shit happens and then Amber becomes a loner because she's tired of Clan life, bla bla bla BerylClan falls, bla bla bla another battle

Then Amber and Azure have kits because logic, and then Amber dies a few moons later. Her last few sentences:

"But, how can I tell if I really am dead? If my whole world is a lie. But I know you aren't, Azure.. I promised you I'd never let anything happen to you... I love you..."

because lesbian cats are legit
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BlazingFireDragon Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Student Filmographer
Great guide!

Would names like Hawkblaze, Iceburn, Darksplash and Bloodfoot be okay? Bloodfoot has his name because he's pure white, put it looks like his legs are always soaked in blood.
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DrakynWyrm Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, if you want my opinion, tread lightly. Especially on Bloodfoot. Unless you're an excellent writer, Bloodfoot is really not a name you want to go with. Redfoot or Brownfoot are probably more suitable, and realistic names. The rest are fine, though.
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
Those names are awesome! I can imagine the cats who those names belong to.
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Skyshimmerpony537 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2014
Thanks for the suggestions!! I was wondering if  any of you could review my plotline and see if it's any good :3
A kit's clan was driven out of their home, his mother being killed in the process. His father slowly seeps into depression, neglecting his two kits. His sister was his best friend but she has a crush, neglecting her brother. He decides as an apprentice someday he wants to be leader and rise their clan again. In the process to leader, his hate for the other clan grows and grows and by the time he's leader, he wants to wipe out their clan completely. He goes on "midnight hunts" killing off their warriors one by one. Soon he starts secretly attacking the other clans, someday planning to become leader of the whole forest. A warrior sees him killing her mate, so word gets out the killer is him. Stormstar quickly dismisses the case and says all clans will bow to him or will be forced. He starts visiting clan camps and making them bow. All who object usually get injured or killed, since he is an expert killer. One time his mother visits his dream, begging him to stop killing cats for her sake. He refuses so his mother has no choice but to kill him. She quickly kills him and sends him to the dark forest, and that's how it ends.
It's only a W.I.P :)
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
Wow... I'll be honest, that's a little harsh. Well, whatever floats your boat. Hey, i've got a fan character named Stormstar, too! He's the leader of the fairly new StormClan! StormClan is a little more rebelious than my other three fan clans.
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wolvesofthebeyond0 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014
This is really good! Great job :meow: (I really respect the fact you give the Follow the Code rule, because, it is true most people completely ignore it)
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Silverumbreon101 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Question: what does vigil mean?
also this is really helpful, i'll share this with my friend :)
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TBR-DA Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
In warrior cats, a vigil was where a cat would spend the night awake and silent untill morning, usually for a ceremony or guarding duties. ^^
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Silverumbreon101 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks, cause I was wondering :3
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boomheart900 Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student General Artist
too bad for me, my current fanclan's leader is called windstar :(
(is it possible for a med. cat to become a deputy')
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Epixelle Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh and Dapplegrass as a medicine cat?
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TBR-DA Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
Dapplegrass is a pretty sweet name! ^^
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Epixelle Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, took me a while to make that one! Sounds like a she-cat's name, but Dapplegrass is a tom.
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Epixelle Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Do Gustpaw, Cinderbreeze, Ashtail, Greylegs, Gingertail, Goldpelt, Oakfur, Spotflower, and Heatherpelt sound ok for WindClan cats?
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Ocarinasong Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2014
Those names sound pretty good to me.
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TBR-DA Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
They sound alright!
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Epixelle Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Awesome! I've changed Heatherpelt to Heathermeadow and Spotflower to Spotfur. How does Dashingblaze, Emberfur, and Stormcloud sound? These are all WindClan cats
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TBR-DA Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
Dashingblaze sounds a bit odd, but the others sound okay!
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Epixelle Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Alright awesome!
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softkittypaw11 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! This was helpful! favourite :)
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TBR-DA Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
Your welcome!
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Animegal244 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014
What do you think of the names Snowstorm and Snowfall?
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